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Originally Posted by swimintheundertow
You know why I don't like you? You don't listen. You ask for suggestions and we tell you is beyond repair the efforts better spent on picking a better topic, something unique and creative, learning a couple new words, reading books and becoming better with how you word things. I literally read through every line and to every single and every time my thought was damn this is cliche. MB as a whole knows more than you, listen arshole.
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Originally Posted by swimintheundertow
I read them all because I thought that there might be one that was decent but no this is complete crap. Throw this ****e away.
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you couldnt have been more helpful with your suggestions. GET you need to pay more attention to the structure, in particular your use of syllables. And repetition of words is ok but here you need to use a wider range of vocabulary. On the topic... write about whatever is closest to you.