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Old 02-10-2007, 08:33 AM   #4 (permalink)
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It seemed to be written the way a prose would, you just used line breaks. The description was pretty hackneyed, particularly sheep. The independence/necklace rhyme was the only one worth keeping. The last line was absolutely terrible.

Sorry, but, this needs a lot of work.
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