Quote:
I remember I could barely fit
The rungs of the ladders
In my five year old hands.
I remember that both my hands,
Could fit in my father’s, simultaneously.
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Maybe change it to my fingers could barely get around it or something...or the verse after to something else, using hands twice so close doesn't sound too hot.
Quote:
remember the wind,
And the bliss that it came with.
Now just memories,
Painted in a mental pastel.
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That and there is unnecessary.
I like itt, also get on AIM you hoe.