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Originally Posted by PaperHurricanesAndPlanes
conjur < conjure? This was quite nice, I thought the ending couplet was rather mundane, though. It's in the title, you don't need it in the poem/song itself.
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That bit's kind of the chorus, although I'm trying to think of a better version which has the same rhythm. Its four beats going up (I want to be) then a pause and four beats coming down (your synonym). It works well musically but I think the words themselves are maybe a bit daft.
Or perhaps, "I want to be your synonym for..." and then nothing... would be better, as I was just putting sin in there to explain that I don't want to be a synonym of the person themselves but rather I want to be a part of their vocabulary.
And yep, by conjur I meant conjure. Don't know why I thought it was spelt like that.