Quote:
Will you be my friend?
Friend until the end?
If you chose not to be my friend,
You're gonna die, die, die in pain!!!
Can you think for once!?
You'll be what I want!
If you are one that walks my path
for now you'll run away from death!
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DIE DIE DIE IN PAIN?! surely not!
This is terrible, i've yet to hear a song about killing someone in the coming from the writer sense that is good, this is no exception.
Quote:
Kill my tears and rape my sorrow
This is now, it's not tomorrow
If it's not for real then we should die!
Be my evil, as I, forgotten
I'm like this 'cause they've mistaken
Maybe if you run, we'll get away
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Kill my tears, rape my sorrow? You need to make the vocabulary less morbid, it doesn't do anything for the piece other then make it dark, and not in a good way.
Quote:
Will you be my friend?
Friend until the end?
If you chose to become my friend
you're gonna get to breathe again
Do you want to live!?
What have you to give?
If you say you'll be friends with me
You're get to see the day!
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Yeah, so you're going to murder them if they aren't your friend...awesome.
Quote:
Kill my tears and rape my sorrow
This is now, it's not tomorrow
If it's not for real then we should die!
Be my evil, as I, forgotten
I'm like this 'cause they've mistaken
Maybe if you run, we'll get away
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See above.
Quote:
What you want's irrelevant
What you'll be is what I want
Be my friend and you will breathe
be my friend and you won't bleed!
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You won't bleed? cmon.
Quote:
Kill my tears and rape my sorrow
This is now, it's not tomorrow
If it's not for real then we should die!
Be my evil, as I, forgotten
I'm like this 'cause they've mistaken
Maybe if you run, we'll get away
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*yawn*
I tried to not be an as
shole with this, but this is just terrible. Quit trying so hard to be goth metal or whatever it is you're trying to me. Some of these lines are just...urgh. "Kill my tears and rape my sorrow"? Cmon.