Levithan

I think this is my first or second venture into the song writing forums. I've been writing my own lyrics and songs for a while now, and ive never thought they were any good, but some people said they were good, so I thought id get your guys opinions on them. So enjoy:

The Longest Goodbye:
I never thought id be saying goodbye to you
Thought we were gonna make it through this
But as you look away
What is there to say

I cant sing and I cant dance And
I cant write you a heartfelt poem
But as you turn away
I hear you say

This is the longest goodbye
Ive ever had to say
And I die a little more
Everytime I think of you

I cant sing and I cant dance and
I cant drive you where you want to go
But as I turn away
I hear you say

This is the longest goodbye
Ive ever had to say
And I die a little more
Everytime I think of you


One more lol:

Your not online and im wondering what's going on
These situations keep running around my mind
They torture me in my every waking moment
I wish I could detatch myself and move away from here
Where your no longer in pain, for which i've cause

I've broken my share of promises
I've told my share of lies
I've wished I could be everything you want
But would you have it any other way?

Havn't got a title for that one yet.
So yeah, feedback would be much appericated, just to let me know where I can improve etc etc

Cheers

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