Music Banter - View Single Post

angrejoe32 · 03-04-2007, 10:31 PM

hey everyone, i was really bored and I decided I wanted to write some lyrics...
tell me what you think about them, this is really the first song i've ever written seriously so please take a look and give me some constructive criticism.

Verse:
Im looking up and they're all looking down at me
I want to find the light, cause it's getting hard to see
They'res needles in my brain and ****ing stones in my pee
I'm a deadhead and that's all I'll ever be

Chorus:
I'm so light headed it almost ****ing hurts
My head is going nowhere 'cause I'm listening to Kurt
I feel so dirty just looking at my skin
I wanna take all this **** and just throw it in the bin

When I finish another verse or two I'll post them.

03-04-2007, 10:31 PM	#1 (permalink)
angrejoe32 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 4	Deadhead hey everyone, i was really bored and I decided I wanted to write some lyrics... tell me what you think about them, this is really the first song i've ever written seriously so please take a look and give me some constructive criticism. Verse: Im looking up and they're all looking down at me I want to find the light, cause it's getting hard to see They'res needles in my brain and **ing stones in my pee I'm a deadhead and that's all I'll ever be Chorus: I'm so light headed it almost ing hurts My head is going nowhere 'cause I'm listening to Kurt I feel so dirty just looking at my skin I wanna take all this ** and just throw it in the bin When I finish another verse or two I'll post them.