^no, a bible thumper is a VERY devout christian who beats people over the head with their beliefs, and is generally very obnoxious about their belief system being the only right one existing.
back to the song....
i didnt like it at all. I know what you were trying to go for, but some of the language just makes it impossible for me to take it seriously. If you're going to go for a very straightforward piece like this, use som artistic liscence and make the language more intelligent. Scrap phrases like "she was dumb", actually a lot of the language here sounds VERY juvinile, so i'd suggest switching it out, because as it is, it doesnt read like a poem, it read's like a gradeschooler's diary entry.
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What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road.
William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways
Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass.
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