The reflection seemed pretty immediate, like he was still 18, but I don't know where I got into a present tense.
Sometimes I use music to create a contrast in narrative voice. One screenplay I used Fugazi 'Waiting Room' for a fight scene and Pavement 'Box Elder' for a breaking up scene. I don't know if that makes any sense....
For this I would suggest The Beatles 'Revolution' for the older reflective voice and, of course, DK's 'Too drunk..' for the recall of events in the scene.
It might help add some distinction.
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