You're right about what you 'rap', and I sort of like the first two verses. Nice and sarcastic to use such a rap to get that kind of message across. The second two verses are just a bit overdone.
Acting like you’re a symbol
Of your race and how they’ll prosper
Well, “fiddy,” if you are,
(I don't get this part really...)
Than the Blacks are pretty ****ed.
(You just ruin any chance of anyone taking you seriously if you say this...)
Acting like you’re the man,
Because you spit words about “hunnies”
(this part is ok)
And poppin’ some caps.
**** you, violence isn’t cool.
(Abrupt end, and you say violence isn't cool as a statement, which should have been a follow up on a few arguments...)
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