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sleepy jack · 04-09-2007, 01:34 AM

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Originally Posted by IHeartMusic

Thanks for the feedback. Regarding the use of "wit" instead of "with," honestly, if the usage of that word is going to take away from the message of the song that much, then I think that the listener/reader of that verse is on a different plane altogether. That sounds like a continuous criticism used by people who don't listen to rap/hip-hop, when the fact of the matter is, hip-hop has its own vernacular, and its own syntax for said vernacular - if you don't listen to it, you're either going to not understand it, or just devalue the music altogether. No disrespect to you; just in general.

I listen to Sage Francis, Ghostface, A Tribe Called Quest, Immortal Technique and others. I understand that i'm just saying when writing it out on a music forum for criticism it looks better if you use the full word, I have no problem with it being rapped that way.

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Additionally, for the last verse seeming like a Brad Paisley knockoff, I don't think hip-hop listeners would think that, considering that Brad Paisley is a country artist, which many rap fans don't listen to. As far as it being too negative, I've seen alcohol do a lot of negative to my family and to myself, including nearly getting killed by a drunk driver. Plus, I made it a point to not just preach about the negativity that comes from it. I tried to actually relate to alcoholics' views, with lines like this:

You must admit, in between, we had some good times
I gave you all that confidence to mack on them dimes
And you would give me to them, they feelin me too
**** up their brain, persuading them to give you the cooch/
When ya moms died, and friends was too busy to console you
I was there, never left, I would hug you, and hold you
Vomit for hours every morning, but that’s a sacrifice
You’re willing to make, I clear your mind and help you sleep at night

and, "*** it I'm through, being sober hasn't worked for me, so I'm bout to really see what these drugs really do"

The second verse was just a little more experimental, as far as personifying a bottle of alcohol. I look at alcohol as a negative, and I've seen it do negative, but I thought that I presented both sides of the situation, and how/why people actually get addicted. True, I could've shown a little bit more toward other situations, but I thought that'd take away from my own personal feelings into the song. Still, I appreciate the feedback.

Yeah I can understand that, its a personl preference deal with those. If you like it keep it.