Hey man, why does everyone gotta be hatin? I think if you're starting out poetry its an alright start, but i also think that if people give you their honest opinion of something, and its not very good (which lets face it, it really isn't) i don't think the first thing you should do is lash out, particularly at writers like crowquill, who have already more than proven themselves with a variety of usually.... often.... sometimes brilliant pieces of work. While your use of repetition did give a bit of extra zing to your final stanza, I think that in time you will find better ways to bring attention to certain ideas and concepts you wish to highlight.
more writing, less pwning!
oh, and somebody leave some damn comments on mah 2 last threads! Lawl><><0|25!
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