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joyboyo53 · 07-05-2007, 08:52 AM

Does cloud nine exist?

Beyond the crystal irony,

this figment of bliss

achieves nothing more

than the rise of my fist.

.

Why was I excluded?

Am I undeserving?

Never was I convicted

Furthermore

I remain committed

.

What do I care?

I am better off without

this unjust fare.

Secretly I ponder,

If only I was there.

I wrote this as a poem but realized it maybe had potential as a song. Let me know what you think about it, and whether or not you believe it could be turned into a song.

07-05-2007, 08:52 AM	#1 (permalink)
joyboyo53 down the rabbit hole Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: the mountain called monkey Posts: 764	irony - a work in progress Does cloud nine exist? Beyond the crystal irony, this figment of bliss achieves nothing more than the rise of my fist. . Why was I excluded? Am I undeserving? Never was I convicted Furthermore I remain committed . What do I care? I am better off without this unjust fare. Secretly I ponder, If only I was there. I wrote this as a poem but realized it maybe had potential as a song. Let me know what you think about it, and whether or not you believe it could be turned into a song.