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The Dave · 09-05-2007, 08:42 AM

^I don't know about that, I wouldn't say that it sounds better either way.

Also, typo: Looks sadly as me as his breathing slows...
I'm guessing you meant to put 'sadly at me.'

But this part to me seems a tad dry:

But little did he know, little did we know,
That it wasn't me,
who was going to need the saving.

I'm not sure what you could change it to, but it just sounds dull compared to the rest of the piece which is really good.

09-05-2007, 08:42 AM	#346 (permalink)
The Dave Me and The Major Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Kentucky Posts: 1,830	^I don't know about that, I wouldn't say that it sounds better either way. Also, typo: Looks sadly as me as his breathing slows... I'm guessing you meant to put 'sadly at me.' But this part to me seems a tad dry: But little did he know, little did we know, That it wasn't me, who was going to need the saving. I'm not sure what you could change it to, but it just sounds dull compared to the rest of the piece which is really good.