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Old 10-17-2007, 01:55 PM   #3 (permalink)
Alo
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Maybe I should place the first verse in a different place in the song?

I wasn't too happy with it anyway, but skipping it makes the song to short (and as you said) too vague.
I like the first line, but the last two can go, they're cheesy.
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