Uhmm... The sentiment is kind of a slanted argument. It's either Home (security, a cage) or Free (Streetwalking, degradation), which doesn't convince that you know enough about either to persuade me one way or another, I'd suggest making the sentiment smaller in scale. Or refrain from trying to make any specific sentiment at all.
But then Creed made a pretty good career out of the grandiose too, so what do I know.
The rhyming... I'm not going to comment on, but I will post the current lyrics for the song I'm working to be fair.
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