Here's my first full song I wrote for my band, it took about a month or two to write. Since I've just started writing I don't know if that's long or short so could you tell me. It's sort of slow rock but it's a bit faster. Read all the way through or it won't make sense. I quite like it, but any constructive critisizim is gladly appreciated
Oh, and I know spelled critizim wrong.
Rescue
Rescue,
Whoa-whoa,
Rescue,
Yeah-yeah,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this rescue,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this now.
What do I have to do to stay alive,
How do I have to do to stay alive,
Why do I have to do to stay alive,
In this wasteland.
I’m feelin’ my heart breakin’,
So I got to take in,
That I need a rescue,
Girl, I hope that rescue’s from you.
Rescue,
Whoa-whoa,
Rescue,
Yeah-yeah,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this rescue,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this now.
What can I do when I’m so lonely,
How can I do when I’m so lonely,
Why should I do when I’m so lonely,
In this wasteland.
My loneliness is ragin’,
My heart confined to cagin’,
Girl, would you care to dance,
Girl, I have to seize this chance.
Rescue,
Whoa-whoa,
Rescue,
Yeah-yeah,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this rescue,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this now.
What do I do to start to dance now,
How do I do to start to dance now,
Why can I do to start to dance now,
In this wasteland.
I’m stuck inside my own mind,
My feelings for you confined,
Such a lonely wasteland,
Break me free and take my hand.
Rescue,
Whoa-whoa,
Rescue,
Yeah-yeah,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this rescue,
Some love, some dance, girl I have to seize this chance,
Girl, I need this now.
Rescue, whoa,
Rescue, yeah,
Need this, rescue,
Lead me there.
So,
Do want to dance with me,
Give me a rescue, set me free.