This is really good. As Crowquill said it took an unexpected turn which drew me in.
I can't imagine how this would fit to music but I'm sure you know yourself.
I'd like to see this theme of Me, Myself and I perhaps in another scenario? I liked the direction it was takin within the first stanza, just a lonely person sitting out in the cold, and was wondering whether you could base a song on that idea instead of the gory and grim outcome this song came to
all in all though I really enjoyed it.
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