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Old 01-14-2009, 05:15 PM   #37 (permalink)
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I liked this, but it did seem a bit overdone with the repitition, which seems to be a commonality with your writing (from what I've read thus far).
Other than that, not too shabby. Good verses and a subtle, yet acceptable couplet for the chorus.
The best part in my opinion was
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Self reflection wasn't your style
Now you put your conduct on trial
Will it sting
Wondering
Have you done more harm than good
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