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Originally Posted by xxawwxsugarxx
Well written. I like it. But there was on part I didn't like:
I don't know why, but I felt like the song was leading in the right direction and then you brought up pedophiles and I was thrown off.
It was well-written. Did you have a certain genre of music in mind for these lyrics?
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It was the only thing that I found out of place too...otherwise you have some great imagry here other that 'pedohile' -- I understand why you are using it...and it has impact...but I am not sure of the 'right' impact...
You have talent and this was enjoyable aside from the little wrinkle in tone/parlance.