Dude I dig it! It has great potential I think!
The whole "You're My Little Angel" bit is a bit obnoxious, I'm not going to lie.
And I must agree that the line
"Went on the floor! blood on your face.. And It just happened in my place!!"
is a bit out of place.
You need to stick to just one theme.
Do you love them indivisibly?
or
Are you in deep sorrow because they died?
I could see it with music like 3Oh!3.
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