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right-track · 02-16-2009, 04:28 PM

Far too many cliches. e.g; "Millions of people swarming like flies"
And lose this line "But chilly, chilly is the evening time" = cheese on toast.

Not bad for a first effort though.

02-16-2009, 04:28 PM	#4 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	Far too many cliches. e.g; "Millions of people swarming like flies" And lose this line "But chilly, chilly is the evening time" = cheese on toast. Not bad for a first effort though.