Between the three piano beats you should bring that sound out so it's more defined. I can barely discern it. I think you should bang it like Miri Ben-Ari's violin in "Sunshine to the Rain".
IMO the number one ingredient to make any song (any genre) good is piano/keyboard... second in rap is probably violin, or some derivative of that.
It's a somewhat crafty beat, but I can't even tell what's going on once the verse comes in. There's more to it and I want to hear it when I'm listening.
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