Thread: My first song
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Old 02-22-2009, 10:49 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by Klamninja View Post
What about:
- her beautyful eyes, it's like I'd seen the stars.
Good, Good! Now that's song writing!
But remember, is like necessary? If you want it there keep it, go ahead, but I'm a big big big fan of metaphors.
I don't know if you ever just look at the stars and talk with her, but if you do you could do something like:
Her eyes mingle with stars
as they sparkle and blend
together, as I lend
my words to her head

Getting the idea? It's all about personal experiences and finding powerful words and ways to express them
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