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Originally Posted by deep_and_depressing
This stabbing pain fills my heart when I hide how I feel today
And I can’t even find the words to say.
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Too many new guys look at poetry and think they can get away with anything. likes its madlibs and you just plug **** in.
For example "this stabbing pain fills my heart"
first off, "fills my heart" is a cliche. These are to be avoided.
secondly, is stabbing pain a liquid? This is a rule breaker, and those are fine but you can always tell te guys whos breaking rules when he doesn't know what the rule is...or that he's even breaking one.
Things appear haphazard but they never are, and if anything points a guy out as new to the craft, thats it.