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Old 03-14-2009, 11:55 AM   #24 (permalink)
Schizotypic
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Here, xxawwxsugarxx, and everyone; now you can understand what the heck I was trying and failed to do. Not that failing is a bad thing IMO, just means I can get better. Would love any suggestions.Before you read, think of it as a story, a progression of events told about Him by an omniscient narrator.

His Terminal Monomania Having an obsession that kills you
A content comatose A happy, vegatative state (being too high to really be considered alive)
He is dying to obtain Dying = wanting, and literally dying

Searching for cause He searches for why
There is no reason To him, there is no reason

His closer allies, His friends
His beautiful value And his self-worth
Fades away and atrophies Because he is not using them, like a muscle, atrophy. They melt away, he doesn't have them anymore.

His desire and his decay His desire for the vegatative state (which he clearly puts over everything) and his decay (his slowly dying)
Unwilling to surrender him They have power over him and will not let go.
Have intercourse and multiply This line says a few things: His Desire and his Decay are related to each other, and effect each other. They work together to kill him and are lovers. Also, their synergistic (make each other more powerful), and they will not surrender him, and they multiplied (it's getting worse), and now he's fukked.

He ascends upward A metaphor for him getting worse and worse
to a miserable bliss Drugs are very polar (oposite), so this is where he is. miserable in life, blissful in being high
on pink fluffy clouds He is finally there, he actually reached it, where he wanted to be from the start of the story. He's in a content comatose, on pink fluffy clouds, constantly high, doesn't have to live, etc.

Expended relations, He spent all his friends, family, etc.
and traded possessions He has nothing but drugs.
He observes the milieu, This line is Ironic, because here he is finally where he wanted to be the entire time, and he observes the milieu (milieu meaning environment)...
Felo-de-se Felo-de-se is a person who kills himself intentionally. He finally got there, looked around, noticed he had nothing, and killed himself. Ironic.


In that minute In the minute that he died.
The world had lost People living in the real world
His carnal remains Canral, meaning of or relating to the body or flesh, and remains being the left overs- I'm saying they only lost the physical left over to this guy and that he had mentaly and emotionally died long before.
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