Do you have any kind of metering or style this is to be sung in? I can read the words but can't seem to find a pulse.
Parts of the song sound like you're scared of falling for someone, and others sound like you're begging them to let you fall for them. If you'd stick with one idea and build it up more (really pound in the fact that you either can't stand being yanked around, or go the other way and focus on why you're getting all these feelings even though you know it's no good). Right now the song seems to have a few warring ideas, and if you just took one and built around it, it would work better.
Although it's not really a music thing, you may want to look at the grammar and punctuation to give the song more readability.
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