I'm gonna agree with Zach. Real lack of structure here but I think you can improve it if you build one up. Give it a rhyme scheme or easy to find rhythm to it.
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Originally Posted by lucifer_sam
If your love for music stops where you can hear the difference between 'super blackened green death metal' and 'technical zoomacroom symphonic metal', then you're a tosser in my book.
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