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Old 07-29-2009, 03:34 AM   #7 (permalink)
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...this is some prime work...far above my head so I don't really no what to say.

The only complaint I'd have(and this is just personal preference alone) is the language seems a little too esoteric sometimes. Sometimes a song needs to make an immediate impact and not require any further probing of the lyrics...don't be afraid of seemingly mundane or predictable lines if that's the first thing that comes to your head....mix trivial stuff in with the poetic stuff to make the poetic stuff seem more powerful....but if comes from the heart then my opinion doesn't hold any water.

good work.
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