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Old 08-04-2009, 10:57 PM   #1 (permalink)
Ravenkin
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Hello everyone, im new here and glad i finally found a place i can get my lyrics critiqued. I'm a singer/songwriter for a Thrash metal band and will be posting some new songs from time to time. Feel free to leave any feedback!


Dead Darling

I've seen the footsteps of your ghost,
and followed the wake of your tide.
watched the waters drown the desert,
Swallowed up from the inside.

The way you look when you are rotting,
decomposed, but still sublime.
your purple lips did quiver,
This night you'll meet mine.

Dead darling I'll still be waiting,
dancing, yet I'm so wrong.
Crossing the river to join you,
laughing but you're still gone.

Sweet sin what have you got me in,
I've seen the days turn to nights.
give me a heart and then let me in,
I wish I would die,
But only to join you love.

Hammer and nails, coffin of blood,
satin and satan all callapsed in the wood.
teach me a lesson, a lesson of love,
hearts seem to break but not ours.

sweetly your cold face pale and pink,
tell me where torture meets your needs.
granted i need you but you dont need me,
where you are goin no bodies free.

Dead darling I'll still be waiting,
dancing, yet I'm so wrong.
Crossing the river to join you,
laughing but you're still gone.

Sweet sin what have you got me in,
I've seen the days turn to nights.
give me a heart and then let me in,
I wish I would die,
But only to join you love.


Dead darling I have waited,
danced, You've been wronged.
cross the river to leave you,
Crying because i lost you....love.
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