yes, you got the meaning behind the song. "rats and cats" are also common lab animals... I kind of meant for the song to make us think about the things we do everyday. Like a rat in a maze or a cat chasing said rat, its a kind of instinctual "blindness" that we humans are
supposedly above. Are we really living and making our own decisions? or are we just doing the steps of a dance, hynotized into doing what the people around us are doing? The theme was taken from my feelings as I am reading 1984 currently and these kind of issues are brought up a lot. Actually vegangelica, the style of this song would be similar to that of Wring that you wrote, though very different, I was going for a similiar creepiness.
Quote:
Twirl, leap--a Grand Jete
march in time
don't step out of line
we're all the same
day after day
but where is it leading?
What are we seeking?
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I like your rework of my chorus. In my original, the "where is it leading, what goal are we seeing?" line was kind of a bridge and not part of the chorus, but does it make more sense to include it in the chorus??
hmm a rework:
Twirl, leap, march in time
don't step out of line
Recite the good rhyme
day after day
but where is it leading?
what are we seeking?