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Originally Posted by Ravenkin
insomnia
Half smiling the moon mocks me,
With a grin so sinister it snares my whim.
And leaves me loveless and lonely,
Broken like a pile of bloody sticks.
What do you want from this little boy?
Who stays up all night to hear your sweet voice.
And turn my heart into your little toy,
Obedient like a marionette.
Why do you keep me up all night?
So sweet a breath as yours,
shouldn't be wasted on my turbid life.
Keep me away from the pain of my shores.
I sink deeper
Day by day
And hear the rain bloom my flower
And petals fall
Into the soft sands
And sink deeper in my breathing
Sinking deeper just sinking
Mocking me
As sinking sands swallow my swollen form
Mocking me
This prolonged life abhorred
And your still mocking me
Smiling like the moon
A half smile so sinister
But it's crueler and crude
I sink deeper as the night turns to day,
The fading gray smashing my colored moonlit night.
The fading gray in listless light,
But soon the flower blooms again.
To get gulped in gallows of sinking sands.
And again sink deeper...
Mocking me
As the sands circle my bloody tears
Mocking me
Just mocking me
unable to sleep and hear a dream
Mocking me
Just mocking me
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Hi, Ravenkin,
Your song "Insomnia" shows the malevolence and appeal of the moon (a metaphor for the beloved, I assume). Am I right that it the speaker is dying (metaphorically)? (Based on the song that follows, this is my guess). I think "Insomnia" describes a love-hate relationship and the pain of experiencing that. The lines that especially stick in my mind are the following, because they remind me of how it feels to be used by someone who has little concern for your welfare or use for your love:
Quote:
What do you want from this little boy?
Who stays up all night to hear your sweet voice.
Why do you keep me up all night?
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I feel that the final stanza (which I italicized) isn't needed to get the song's idea across, and the song would stand quite well alone without that final stanza. Since I'm often reminded to make my lyrics briefer, my guess is someone else may feel the same about these lyrics!
Your songs often have a very romantic lyrical quality...they seem more beautiful than harsh, even as they deal with what are supposed to be traumatic love/life events...which is interesting to me, since I'm not sure exactly how thrash music would/should sound incorporating your lyrics. Although I know little about genres and their dividing lines, I'm thinking that Stone Birds' feeling that the lyrics sound more like dark folk is probably a good assessment!
--Erica