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Originally Posted by wolverinewolfweiselpigeon
I packed my bags two days after my high school graduation
And said goodbye to my hometown without much hesitation
I jumped a plane to SFO in my determination
And made my way through the north bay with sense of liberation
My sister said I left due to lack of appreciation
Dad cried out "abandonment" toned with intimidation
But they can't steal the thrill I feel negating expectation
And guilt trips call for too much fuel and duel cooperation
EDIT: Still don't know what to do for the chorus but I finished up the lyrics -
You looked right in my face and said you don't deserve resentment
That night when you disowned me, yeah, you said you never meant it
So I promised my forgiveness and you filled up with contentment
But I had my fingers crossed inside the pockets of my jacket
You always said that anger's justified when provocation's present
I grew up knowing you were wrong, accepting the unpleasent
But now today three states away I'm calling you pathetic
And if the whole world shit on you it's only cause you let it
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I like both, I actually love the second one. It's very.. emotive, yet harsh. Which I like, emotive in part where you had
"But I had my fingers crossed inside the pockets of my jacket" and harsh "
And if the whole world shit on you it's only cause you let it" I like those lines best, the first one cause it symbolises hope to me, and the second I feel like it's a rebellion, and you feel anger towards the person its directed at. Good work
Also, I'm no music critic so I don't really know, thats just what it's like to me though, hope it helps
