It's obvious how you started to just write your ramblings, and then they began to shape up the more you wrote, which shows in the 3rd part. It's a shame you stopped there though, I imagine the next one would've been perfect.
It kinda shows though, that you're not taking it all too seriously. You're maybe taking the whole surreal approach of letting your subconscious speak with your pen, which is very cool... but it still needs some kind of built up, and a main idea that pull everything neatly together.
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