Why do you need any more?
You've made your point. Maybe, musically, a bridge would be nice, something with a different feel. But you've got enough stuff here. Short and sweet can be good.
But, whatever happens, keep writing. If you're not happy with it, keep writing until you are. Go through as many drafts as you need to. It doesn't even matter if they're good.
But if you need some inspiration, you could kill the character. I suggest a ninja.
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I know all those girls you been messin around with i dont want your STD's. So boy quit with your chat i dont wanna talk about my cat, i dont wanna see your face, now leave.
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