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Old 02-28-2010, 03:27 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Hier in Iowa ist es auch jetzt ziemlich kalt und ich freue mich auf Fruhling!

Your video and song are very professional. I feel t3hplatyz0rz does a good job making suggested grammatical changes in your lyrics. Would you perhaps like to type all the lyrics out here so that we can check them more closely?

One word choice that I would prefer to see altered is when you say, "Can't complain because I'm feeling all right." Since "feeling all right" is used so often in songs, this sounds rather generic. Still, it is true that spring makes me feel all right and peaceful!

I enjoyed seeing you play all your instruments...trumpet, violin, block flute, keyboards, and clarinet! I can see you enjoy putting all your musicality into your music. Your instrumental sections were well done. I especially like the energetic part (at 4:17).

I feel writing a song about a standard topic (such as seasons) can be difficult because it is hard to make the song fresh, which I felt your song did for the most part.
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