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Originally Posted by RossFrazer
Hey everyone,
First of all, will hopefully be posting here every once in a while, to help out and to post some songs Im writing, who throws round emotion more than a moody teenager, eh?
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Moody teenagers FTW.
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Originally Posted by RossFrazer
Well here's really the only song I've really thought about writing properly (not the first song I've ever written, just one I'd think of using).
Cause you're a computer,
Running on a script,
You said you'd break away
And yes, you did...
A hole in your head like no one else,
Cause no body else had just dropped dead,
Hot lead, cures the heavy heart,
Washed it down, with cyanide shots...
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:O
Suicide in the second paragraph?
Where more can you go after that?
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Originally Posted by RossFrazer
You'll never be an individual,
If you don't try to break the chain...
A computer, running on a script,
Let's all go, cut, copy, paste the codes,
Stick to, the given format,
Keep to, the mandatory...
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Is it supposed to be that he is rebelling against the hive mind society in such a prescribed way that it is no longer rebellion?
Very artful, and yet emotionally interesting at well.
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Originally Posted by RossFrazer
You'll never be an individual,
If you can't live to tell the tale...
Cause you're a computer,
Running on a script,
You said you'd break away
And yes, you did...
Any thoughts/constructive criticism?
Thanks
/R.
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OOOOOOooooooOOOOOOoooOOOOOooooooohhhhhh........... creepy.
There's a kid in my town who killed himself a while back. I just heard about it though. That reminds me. I wrote and played a song about the well-known "an hero" incident and played it at an open mic. I didn't realize that one of the patrons had recently killed themselves, although everybody had been alluding to it all night long. It was REALLY awkward, although I can't say I was particularly sad.
I'm not saying you should censor your works, but be very careful when you play them. I haven't gone back there since, and somehow I don't think I'm wanted.