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Originally Posted by Dr.Seussicide
I liked it, it's good, but I just thought you lost a bit of the flow at this point: "On the brink of a lip-sync'd lie from high on the sole of the boss"
Anyways, the in the first four lines it flowed perfectly dull knife; skull crisis; seagull life is, etc, but yeah that's about the only critique I had, keep 'em coming man.
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Thanks for the reply.
I actually worked out the rhythm intensively and it fits, but you gotta have context. I may do a hiphop track with these lyrics expanded to show you what I mean... but they all fit rhythmically.
Note that a lot of my lines, including the one you brought up, actually start before the first downbeat of the line it's on. Like an 8th before.