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Sljslj · 04-26-2010, 07:07 PM

I decided I REALLY don't like Another Blind Hater. So I took some of the ideas from it and made what I think to be my best song yet. Check it and please PLEASE comment. This is the first song I've ever written that has no definite chorus. I'm trying to balance anger and imagery, so that's really what this is. It has no title at the moment. (EDIT: It does now.) Anything with *s around it isn't part of the song.

APOCALYPSE HANDYMAN

You.
You run to the scene, hammer and nail in hand.
Feed us promises of a better day to follow.
Chew it for us and make us swallow.
We swim and swim while you watch from the shallow.
And if we die, you still get praise.

You're so clever, but you're so stupid.
It's such a deadly combination.
You can lead us by the thousands.
Lead us straight down.
Down to hell, or to the sea to drown.

You're nothing but a hater and a liar.
I think the day will come when we fight back.
But, I fear, not until we're knee deep in fire.
This place is yours for now, but not forever.

Shut up.
You're not an angel.
Shut the **** up.
You're not a savior.
Shut up and stop killing us.

You've got a million people with their heads up their asses.
And a million more with their hands up yours.
You won't say the words that need be spoken.
You will try to mend what is broken.
But duct tape can't fix everything, you prick. *that, by the way, is my favorite part =)*

Ah!
Oh ****!
You run to the scene, hammer and nail in hand.
Feed us promises of a better day to follow.
(Better days never to come.)
Chew it for us and make us swallow.
We swim and swim while you watch from the shallow.
(I hope the tide tears you down.)
And if we die, you still get praise.
If we die.

Shut up.
You're no angel. *This part is heavier than before and yes, I changed it from "not an" to "no" on purpose because it sounds better with the heavier riff.*
Shut the **** up.
You're no savior.
Shut up and stop this bull****.

You've got a million people with their heads up their asses.
And a million more with their hands up yours.
You won't say the words that need be spoken.
You will try to mend what is broken.
But duct tape can't fix everything, you prick.
****... you!**

04-26-2010, 07:07 PM	#46 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	I decided I REALLY don't like Another Blind Hater. So I took some of the ideas from it and made what I think to be my best song yet. Check it and please PLEASE comment. This is the first song I've ever written that has no definite chorus. I'm trying to balance anger and imagery, so that's really what this is. It has no title at the moment. (EDIT: It does now.) Anything with s around it isn't part of the song. APOCALYPSE HANDYMAN You. You run to the scene, hammer and nail in hand. Feed us promises of a better day to follow. Chew it for us and make us swallow. We swim and swim while you watch from the shallow. And if we die, you still get praise. You're so clever, but you're so stupid. It's such a deadly combination. You can lead us by the thousands. Lead us straight down. Down to hell, or to the sea to drown. You're nothing but a hater and a liar. I think the day will come when we fight back. But, I fear, not until we're knee deep in fire. This place is yours for now, but not forever. Shut up. You're not an angel. Shut the *** up. You're not a savior. Shut up and stop killing us. You've got a million people with their heads up their asses. And a million more with their hands up yours. You won't say the words that need be spoken. You will try to mend what is broken. But duct tape can't fix everything, you prick. that, by the way, is my favorite part =) Ah! Oh ***! You run to the scene, hammer and nail in hand. Feed us promises of a better day to follow. (Better days never to come.) Chew it for us and make us swallow. We swim and swim while you watch from the shallow. (I hope the tide tears you down.) And if we die, you still get praise. If we die. Shut up. You're no angel. This part is heavier than before and yes, I changed it from "not an" to "no" on purpose because it sounds better with the heavier riff.* Shut the ** up. You're no savior. Shut up and stop this bull. You've got a million people with their heads up their asses. And a million more with their hands up yours. You won't say the words that need be spoken. You will try to mend what is broken. But duct tape can't fix everything, you prick. ... you! Last edited by Sljslj; 05-14-2010 at 04:54 PM. Reason: Gave it a title.