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Old 08-25-2010, 08:14 AM   #128 (permalink)
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Stone Birds, I like the main idea of the song.

One recommendation I have is for the vocals. It sounds like you have used your voice in chorus/harmony throughout the song. Have you considered just having some segments where you sing in a strong solo voice without the background harmony? The harmony gives the vocals a droning feel.

Also, since you repeat the same lines again and again, sometimes it got repetitive to me. I felt you could increase the volume of some of the background instrumentals that disappear in the mix. For example, were you using some harmonica? I thought I heard it very faintly. Making these background instrumentals stand out more could give more uniqueness to the different segments of the song.
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