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Tekron 07-04-2004 12:12 PM

Tell me what you guys think of this...
 
i was aiming for an earth+ sky comparison and stuff for this song, its prolly the best taht i've done as far as the sky.

Letter from The Moon

After relationships
I am suddenly in an eclipse
in between the earth and the sun
i am the moon its not fun

cross the sky like shooting star
to be in the middle
and have 2 sides burnin at your skin
and feeling so little

blame me for pulling darkness
across the earth
until daylight will come again
when the moon is defeated and then

my skin is feelin pressure
theres no water, in my heart
each impact makes a crater
and im leavin you, in the dark!

blame me
for shutting out your eyes
and now you can find love
you know its just our lives

only on earth our looks lead to success
do you think I like being gray
maybe someday ill make a statement for the moon
love will in the dark and stay that way

just cuz you have eyes
and the earth is, colorful and round
doesnt mean you can judge by
looks, thats not your heart
just remember what i told you
use love in the dark

woahhhh, im feelin lonely
and the sky is fallin on me
and the heat from the sun is burnin me up
and i'll continue to be flamed with my luck.

Tekron 07-04-2004 09:46 PM

bump,

some one comment please im dyin here

Tekron 07-05-2004 05:24 PM

bump #2, can i get some comments? please? im still dying.

Tekron 07-05-2004 10:19 PM

bump #3, cmon guys, i havnt had one comment on this, in the mean time imma post this song i just wrote lol

The Movement of Love

The birds fly around
each one reminds me of you
floating delecately
thats the way you move

close to me
able to warm my heart
softly kiss my thoughts
everything i know is forgot

when you're in my arms
i feel complete
when you're around me
I never have to compete

I am everything I'm born to be
I'm not afraid again
I'm the same with you
never changed, same Evan

You said hold my in your arms
I grabbed your hand
took you out in the rain
my heart pounding like a rubber band

I told you nothing makes me feel this way
no action, no words will fill me up like you do
and no one can do this
I know when we kissed my heart grew

You said you loved me
and I said the same
there was only the truth in your words
there was no ****ing game

Love was simple, and amazing
your eyes touch my heart
and your smile warms my head
i melt inside, loneliness is fed

Now I am done
I'll never have to love again
I would hold you all night
until the rain dries from the light

and everything is beautiful again
your eyes described through words
my heart described by a vibration
I love the flowers, the light and the birds

and I'll accept in my life
that I am happy again.

the last one 07-06-2004 03:05 AM

not really my thing, but much better than i could do. My songs always sound like i'm trying to be something i'm not or they are crap.

David Frost 07-10-2004 11:21 PM

well, do these songs have music to them? it would be better to post a whole song when you call it a song rather than a bunch of words.

Tekron 07-11-2004 10:38 AM

lol in time they will, my band hasnt decided who my second guitarist is gonna be yet.


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