Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
07-19-2006, 04:37 PM
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Maybe start off telling of the moments that led...
Maybe start off telling of the moments that led to the first touch. So the first few lines build on his presence and how you're aware of him, then maybe around the middle you start to engage in his...
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Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
07-19-2006, 04:59 AM
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Replies: 11
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It gets better toward the end. The first four...
It gets better toward the end. The first four lines are eather too jolty or just don't make any sense to me; infact it's probably a mixture of both, and causation of one another.
Perhaps you could...
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