Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
08-13-2006, 03:45 AM
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The bolded one... I just moved the "it" down a...
The bolded one... I just moved the "it" down a line, now it's easier to understand while reading. "Everything dream" - this could work, but is it what you mean, or would you want to slip an "a" in...
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Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
08-13-2006, 01:56 AM
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Replies: 11
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It's turning into a beaut.
The bolded...
It's turning into a beaut.
The bolded area... I think you need to move that first "it" down to the next line... the aesthetic of the stanzas aren't as important as the message. Try putting :it:...
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Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
08-13-2006, 01:46 AM
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Replies: 11
Views: 2,053
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