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Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 12-10-2008, 06:16 PM
Replies: 115
Views: 11,865
Posted By creepinson
okie, here we go. i like the first one,...

okie, here we go.

i like the first one, although some expansion would have been nice. i realize that its supposed to have that succinct and stripped down feel, but there's lots more you could...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 12-06-2008, 11:42 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,237
Posted By creepinson
Body Of Water

This is one of my band's songs, tell me whachu think. crit 4 crit!

Body of Water
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So here we find ourselves, more alive than ever
Everything we are is reaching out for...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-22-2008, 05:14 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,157
Posted By creepinson
holy **** its crowe! i've been without your...

holy **** its crowe! i've been without your helpful criticisms and vague vibe of internet camaraderie for so long!

i recognize/agree with what you brought up in your crit, and take it to heart. I...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-17-2008, 05:35 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,157
Posted By creepinson
Yeah, i guess it is more a poem than anything....

Yeah, i guess it is more a poem than anything. Alot of the stuff i write comes from needing lyrics for my band but probably about half of it ends up like this... which as you said is not as well...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-11-2008, 03:39 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 2,585
Posted By creepinson
when i first read this i was high, and in terms...

when i first read this i was high, and in terms of the effectiveness of this particular bit of writing, i don't think its a good sign that i was distracted by the vibrations my eyes made in my head...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-11-2008, 03:25 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,157
Posted By creepinson
thanks mang, i know i do kinda go crazy with the...

thanks mang, i know i do kinda go crazy with the wordiness sometimes... but compared to a lot of my other stuff this has like 4 and a half syllables so....... mah battle against superfluous diction...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-10-2008, 06:38 PM
Replies: 128
Views: 13,268
Posted By creepinson
Like PapeHurriPlanes said, the imagery was very...

Like PapeHurriPlanes said, the imagery was very detailed and rather beautiful and worked together well. The repetition of "in my dream" was effective too, but, and this might just be me, i think the...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-10-2008, 06:10 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,157
Posted By creepinson
Forgetmenaut

Wow, i haven't posted on here in a very long time. But I've still been writing and obviously you have too, so there's something of mine that I'd like your opinion on. Half the references that are ...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 12-12-2007, 04:39 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,546
Posted By creepinson
Thanks for the input, i'll make some...

Thanks for the input, i'll make some adjustments...

Also, I definately haven't served in either Iraq or Afghanistan, i'm 16 and from Canada... soo... i vote pacifism
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 12-07-2007, 03:35 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,546
Posted By creepinson
First song in a long time

These Walls Have Ears and Fangs and Fears
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Before I cared that there was heaven
Before I learned how to feel sorrow
I dreamt of how I would die here...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-08-2007, 12:32 PM
Replies: 6
Thc
Views: 1,790
Posted By creepinson
lol don't be frontin man... you don't need to rap...

lol don't be frontin man... you don't need to rap about the same stuff as everyone else to make it good, stick to what you know, because the closer you actually are to your subject matter the more...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-07-2007, 02:10 PM
Replies: 6
Thc
Views: 1,790
Posted By creepinson
hey man... finally someone wrote a song with some...

hey man... finally someone wrote a song with some worthwhile topics... relationships? tragedy? emotions? CANNABIS? biggity bam what a rush... It started out good, but then it deteriorates into...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-04-2007, 06:07 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,232
Posted By creepinson
some of the rhyming seems pretty forced, you just...

some of the rhyming seems pretty forced, you just need to keep working at writing so that you can find more original, subtle and imaginative concepts and uses of imagery. The two similes are saw were...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-04-2007, 06:01 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 1,147
Posted By creepinson
I was enchanted until the final line of the 3rd...

I was enchanted until the final line of the 3rd stanza. it just seems a bit too blunt for an otherwise wonderfully worded and written piece. I'm sure you can find a way to get the same idea across...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-04-2007, 01:35 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 2,498
Posted By creepinson
Hey man, why does everyone gotta be hatin? I...

Hey man, why does everyone gotta be hatin? I think if you're starting out poetry its an alright start, but i also think that if people give you their honest opinion of something, and its not very...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-02-2007, 07:04 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,245
Posted By creepinson
First hip-hop song - The Deliberation

This is the first hip-hop song I ever wrote. I tried to get as far from what seems to be mostly lame hip-hop and rap that is prevalent today, and into more thought out concepts and melodies.

The...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 06-22-2007, 06:13 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,112
Posted By creepinson
not bad man, mostly good, i like the chill,...

not bad man, mostly good, i like the chill, relaxed sort of feel. Some words do sorta throw off the flow though, like the usage of the word austin, which doesn't really rhyme with pretend. Besides...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 06-16-2007, 02:47 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 1,079
Posted By creepinson
i'm hoping just to make it into a song with a...

i'm hoping just to make it into a song with a really big, epic sorta feel. the lyrical content definately makes room for parts which are both very heavy and very quiet and mournful... its gonna be...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 06-13-2007, 07:53 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 2,061
Posted By creepinson
i like it, it has a very haunting quality, mainly...

i like it, it has a very haunting quality, mainly due to the vocals. I think i hear a few chords that are a bit off, but luckily it doesn't really take away from the over all effect of the song....
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 06-06-2007, 06:39 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 1,079
Posted By creepinson
Sunraze

sup bitchez, its been time... i have been writing alot, just not posting here, recently i got the smallest little bit of inspiration and this is what came out of it, tell me how you like it... its...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 02-05-2007, 04:21 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 930
Posted By creepinson
My last supper

sup queers... i just recorded this song this weekend, and its going to be on my bands upcoming ep... hope you enjoy

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My last supper...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 11-01-2006, 02:11 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 1,258
Posted By creepinson
Midas Critics PLEASE

So we may be recording this song soon. I posted this song before, and didnt get a single post, so im hopin someone could give some input before we have to lay it down for sure.

Make me a Midas...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-23-2006, 02:23 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 1,002
Posted By creepinson
Make me a Midas

is it just me or has this place REALLY slowed down? seems a month ago there were too many posts and now theres barely any. whatever.

Make me a Midas
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You gave me a...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-23-2006, 01:35 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,637
Posted By creepinson
obviously the fact that youre using lines that...

obviously the fact that youre using lines that have already been used means you need to try to express relatively cliche emotions in a more original and interesting way

to get you started, try to...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-23-2006, 01:35 PM
Replies: 28
Views: 3,325
Posted By creepinson
i agree with moses... but rhymezone.com kicks...

i agree with moses... but rhymezone.com kicks rhymer.com's ass any day
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