Losing Your Way
 

And here's another one. Again, rip the song to shreds and please single out individual lines for criticism!

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Tonight we drink and smoke til we go blind
The world will come in shapes which we no longer understand
Confusion by our own design
Now everything is old and new, begin the dance unplanned

My eyes have skinned like orange peels
I put my trust in those who deal
I span around, fell off the wheel
But shouldn’t feel…

Ashamed
Shouldn’t feel ashamed
For losing your way
You are losing your way
Feeling fazed
With histories erased
Losing your way
You are losing your way


Fallen, fallen from the cart
You fell before the finish line and ended up three miles before the start
Feeling weaker than before
You want to say that it was great, but you cannot be sure

My eyes have skinned like orange peels
I put my trust in those who deal
I span around, fell off the wheel
But shouldn’t feel…

Ashamed
Shouldn’t feel ashamed
For losing your way
You are losing your way
Feeling fazed
With histories erased
Losing your way
You are losing your way


This is the feeling that gets you each time
When you don’t know everything you did last night
This is the moment your mind comes unplugged
When you don’t know what you mixed into your blood

But hey, how can you abstain
From indulgences that you can’t even name?
Well, I’ve lost cash and hours of time
But I’ll never know nothing about my crimes

i had to reread this line a few times, its a little confusing:
(the first part about old and new sounds ok, but the second part to the line just doesnt sound like its spoken correctly??)



i liked these though, really good:

I'll definitely change the fourth line then. I can see what you mean, it really sticks out as a dumb line when you read it and doesn't make any sense when you read it aloud (or when I sing it)!

Thanks for your help. Any other comments?