Heavens on the fourth floor Im on the fith
 

For every broken heart in this room
Ill sing an extra note
we could believe if we wanted
she said "It's our mistakes that perfect our dramas"
Love once was a four letter word
now its a paragraph telling me
how wrong everything has gotten
(chorus)And were going nowhere
but its just enough
for me to never feel this way again(/chorus)
Sometimes it feels like you never cared at all
time and time again it feels
like were failing again
passing days
slip away
from these hands that
would build you worlds
(chorus)
and the morning dove sings
in a key weve never heard
if Im lucky Ill never fall in love again










Rough Draft
thought Id try something new
and stick with simplcity
feedback?

good. When writing a song like that you can verge on the cheesy, but you have avoided it. Well done.

thanks man.

The chorus feels dialed in. But other than that, it's really good.

yeah I guess the chorus was forced.

sing it real soft and make people cry

Considering in another post Number 12 said that he was good at shouting, I doubt he will be singing this song softly. It would be like Slipknot covering James Blunt...

hahah that would be fun

Can you imagine it? You're beautiful BUT I WANT TO KILL YOU THEN SMELL YOUR BLOOD

i give it the thumbs up. heartfelt without being cheesy. nice.

i hate james blunt

its more like the black dahlia murder covering johnny cash
while cutting up fetuses

i love black dahlia

First of all Web Zeppelin-shut the f*ck up. You're not funny, not clever, not cool and NOT WORTH OUR TIME. Go and make yourself useful and play in the road. I'm sure the cars' bumpers will welcome you more than the people at Music Banter will. Secondly, I think James Blunt is alright. Sometimes he does get a bit emotional, but I think his album was pretty decent. The only thing that annoys me is the way he talks-does that guy EVER laugh.

Im actually a ver devoted christian thank you very much.

Way to mispell blasphemous and make yourself look like a complete idiot.

The song...the song was brilliant, emotional without being cliche or just another song a 12 year old would put in her screename...it was wonderful, good job Number12!