New song (album, quote)

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 12-28-2005, 08:44 PM

Our Red Summers End In Blue Winters

With hearts on display

we walk down the halls

where we are famous for

our lack of originality

noone knows how to stop the rain

if I put my life on hold

we could breathe in new ways

my heart beats irregularly without you

facedown below sea level

I only seek tommorow

before we go into the night

I want to feel your insecurity

right by my side

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 03:30 PM

your going into many directions at once. not sticking to one major point.

but that doesnt mean i dont like it.

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 12-29-2005, 08:19 PM

I guess

sleepy jack · 12-29-2005, 08:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crazy Luv

your going into many directions at once. not sticking to one major point.

I disagree with that it seems to go on like with one point just using diffirent metaphors it makes perfect sense.

I like the imagery is nice i especially like the "I want to feel your insecurity right by my side" thought id think it would sound better if it was "I want to feel your insecurity next to me"

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 08:47 PM

It's very good. Again, no cheesey ****. If you put out an album I'd buy it.

TrampInaTux · 12-30-2005, 06:23 AM

Some very good lines in there. Although I don't like the rhyming structure, I think with a bit more work, like madeinNY said, this could turn out to be on an album that I would buy.

PS. madeinNY I knew that comment would get quoted.

12-28-2005, 08:44 PM	#1 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	New song Our Red Summers End In Blue Winters With hearts on display we walk down the halls where we are famous for our lack of originality noone knows how to stop the rain if I put my life on hold we could breathe in new ways my heart beats irregularly without you facedown below sea level I only seek tommorow before we go into the night I want to feel your insecurity right by my side __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

12-29-2005, 08:19 PM	#3 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	I guess __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

12-29-2005, 08:47 PM	#5 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	It's very good. Again, no cheesey ****. If you put out an album I'd buy it. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-29-2005, 03:30 PM	#2 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	your going into many directions at once. not sticking to one major point. but that doesnt mean i dont like it.

12-30-2005, 06:23 AM	#6 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Some very good lines in there. Although I don't like the rhyming structure, I think with a bit more work, like madeinNY said, this could turn out to be on an album that I would buy. PS. madeinNY I knew that comment would get quoted.