Originally Posted by Crowe

Uh, just so the contradiction bashing stops... I'll copy and paste what I wrote in my critique, just because it's really long and probably no one but crazy will read it...

Ok, now, about the contradictory lines in which people are giving you **** about. This is not incorrect. I'll tell you why! This works in Dialectical Methodology, contradiction does not refer to a conflict purely in a person's thinking or in logic. Rather, it indicates, for example, a clash between one's theory and one's practice, or one's words and one's deeds.

Now whether Crazy new he was doing this or not, this is what it turned out to be... hes not wrong, its just something you're not used to.

Originally Posted by madeinNY

I coulda swore I review this...

Umm, yea the "she" and "they" part is way repetitive..other than that I like it...

They are willing to let anyone in if they actually tried <<that part actually kinda doesn't go with the rest of the "they" part in my opinion...maybe if you re-worded it a tinge...


When she looks in the mirror, she sees two too << the "too" shouldn't be here yet, just at the end of the song, because we haven't yet heard of another person or "they"....

Originally Posted by Crazy Luv

No worries, i have to fix that(getting ppl not to be confused)

how about this one....

Revenge
There was something about the look in your eyes
That took me away to secret paradise
But then you let a bitch share my place
So i took my fist and smashed it in your face

You wanna cheat on me
I'll show you the bitch i could truly be
Cause you see,
That nice girl is gone and i took her place
Im here to teach you a lesson
You'll be forced to embrace

I tore my key into your pretty car
Broke into it by shattering the window
Took my keys and ripped deep into your leather seats
Busted both headlights and slashed the tires
Thats just the beginning

You wanna cheat on me
I'll show you the bitch i could truly be
Cause you see,
That nice girl is gone and i took her place
Im here to teach you a lesson
You'll be forced to embrace

Guess who wasnt home at this time of day
Got in through the side window and had my way
Gave my buddies the address of where i would be
Accidently forgot to lock and close the door behind me
Still dont think you had enough

You wanna cheat on me
I'll show you the bitch i could truly be
Cause you see,
That nice girl is gone and i took her place
Im here to teach you a lesson
You'll be forced to embrace

Called your work and had a talk with your boss
Informed him that i was in there earlier
That this particular worker reeked of pot
That should get the ball of suspicion rolling
Almost done, just one more thing

You wanna cheat on me
I'll show you the bitch i could truly be
Cause you see,
That nice girl is gone and i took her place
Im here to teach you a lesson
You'll be forced to embrace

Arranged to meet up with you and the dip**** that shared my place
Funny thing is that you actually cheated on her with me
Wait a minute, can you repeat that a little louded...
"Playing aint easy when you're in the game"

Originally Posted by jibber

to be honoest, i'm not crazy about this one. it reads more as a rant than a song. it's supposed to be a song about revenge, but the subject matter makes the protagonist of the song just seem like a petty, angry, overemotional b*tch. I know the character in the song is acknowledging that she's a b*tch, but still, it just doesnt shed a good light on it, and makes it seem pretty juvenile. Your other one was a whol lot better.