Unappreciated man hymn (song, guitar)

TrampInaTux · 03-31-2006, 01:44 PM

Passing through the subway with my broken guitar
Coffee in my hand looking for a place to hibernate
maybe tomorrow will bring fame and fortune
but I take it all with a handful of luck
Misfortune guides me but it doesn't bring me down
Only when I see a light and I cannot reach it
Dirty men and women are towering shoulders above me
Yet I cower to an invisible force that shatters me
And pray to another invisible force that completes me
Melted down men stare at me from their bunks on the floor
Seeing something in me that I know I should hide
Maybe when the day comes I will fix the guitar and thus my world
but until that day comes I will stare at the ground
And think of those who died to sustain my void

Crazy Luv · 03-31-2006, 11:21 PM

Sry, but i dont like it. It left me feeling "mm'kayish". maybe its the little flow it has. maybe...

TrampInaTux · 03-31-2006, 11:36 PM

It's not a song it's more of a poem by the way, although the word 'Hymn' does make you think that it is a song.

03-31-2006, 01:44 PM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Unappreciated man hymn Passing through the subway with my broken guitar Coffee in my hand looking for a place to hibernate maybe tomorrow will bring fame and fortune but I take it all with a handful of luck Misfortune guides me but it doesn't bring me down Only when I see a light and I cannot reach it Dirty men and women are towering shoulders above me Yet I cower to an invisible force that shatters me And pray to another invisible force that completes me Melted down men stare at me from their bunks on the floor Seeing something in me that I know I should hide Maybe when the day comes I will fix the guitar and thus my world but until that day comes I will stare at the ground And think of those who died to sustain my void

03-31-2006, 11:21 PM	#2 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Sry, but i dont like it. It left me feeling "mm'kayish". maybe its the little flow it has. maybe...

03-31-2006, 11:36 PM	#3 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	It's not a song it's more of a poem by the way, although the word 'Hymn' does make you think that it is a song.