Haha same here actualleh, very good though.

I downloaded that Sublime song and it does work, but that's not the way I intended it to be sung.

I agree with you, this is the best i've read from you. but i dont like this line...
kiss all the way back to her scummy little flat

Why don't you like that line?

i think cause it stuck out for me. i was all into it, going with the flow you know, & that line kinda made me stumble a lil bit.